Unafraid to love

08.29.09

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Man: What does it take for you to believe
this honest love I offer you – undeceived.

A light in my heart reverberates a song,
only sopranos and tenors dare take on.

Woman: Lies! Lifted from your lips,
My father warned me about your colored aesthetics.

Try you must, to make me persuade,
my tired heart wont make a mistake.

Man: I did what you asked, sacrificed my soul,
this life is yours, still I give you more.

These wounds are deep, your words sliced through,
all I ever wanted is to spend forever with you.

Woman: One last sacrifice, one last request,
your heart on a silver platter – apparently fresh.

It is the only way that my father would oblige,
to marry a man whose heart beats tonight.

Man: If it’s the only way, for you to love me,
I shall fulfill that offering, so your father will see.

I, Prometheus, give my heart to him,
a token of this vow to you, his childish whim.

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Zorlone, an anagram of my name. A title fitting to this blog of mine. Words are created every time such as blogs created online. This site will showcase thoughts translated into words. Dream. Create. Inspire. Follow me in Twitter @Zorlone or visit me too at 140 Flash Fiction.

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34 Comments

  • At 2009.08.29 08:14, Badong said:

    isa sa mga pinaka-paborito kong storya sa greek mythology. mas pinakganda niyo pa!

    • At 2009.08.29 09:48, Reena said:

      sino si Prometheus? :D
      i can’t relate. hahaha

      • At 2009.08.29 12:49, Zorlone said:

        @Badong,

        Salamat! Nahihiwagaan kasi ako sa healing powers nya. hehehe.

        Z

        • At 2009.08.29 12:50, Zorlone said:

          @Reena,

          Uhm… tanungin natin si Badong. he he he

          Z

          • At 2009.08.29 23:08, Pasyalera said:

            Hey Doc Zi. We missed you! :P Hmmm, inlove? :P

            -Wayne

            • At 2009.08.30 06:31, Zorlone said:

              @Wayne,

              Hehehe. I am not sure.. more of afraid, than unafraid. ;)

              Z

              • At 2009.08.30 17:29, d'Arch Angel said:

                Prometheus is also an icon of regeneration in medicine, diba Doc? Great poem, Z. I did not know of this story about Prometheus. What I know is the big bird and liver thing. (The image above)

                • At 2009.08.30 17:47, Jena Isle said:

                  This is a new type of writing for you Z, puede ka rin sa ganito, it came out good.

                  • At 2009.08.31 15:38, jhongmed said:

                    Yah Doc Z, You’re indeed a very versatile writer!

                    I guess Lyle Ham has done a good job with your theme.

                    Very Nice!

                    • At 2009.08.31 21:45, Zorlone said:

                      @Luke,

                      Yeah! That’s about the only thing I know also. hehehe. I actually found out that @badongskie reads about him, I still have to ask more info about this Titan. About the poem, I just made it up. an experiment. I thought it would be appropriate that he is in this poem.

                      Z

                      • At 2009.08.31 23:50, Holly Jahangiri said:

                        As the mother of a son, I have only four words for this:

                        “DITCH THE PSYCHO CHICK.”

                        • At 2009.09.01 05:53, petit said:

                          if this poem is a song, its a revival. at first i thought you are making a script… next time, i wont be surprised if you’ll be writing for stage plays.

                          i agree with holly. perhaps men those days could do anything to please the father of the girl, but present times show that seldom do we have men like that….

                          i’m just wondering, do you have a problem with her father doc Z?…hmmm..

                          • At 2009.09.01 13:38, Zorlone said:

                            @Jena,

                            I just tried to make a conversation in poetry. Not really expecting for this to come out, but it did. hehehe.

                            Thanks!

                            Z

                            • At 2009.09.01 13:40, Zorlone said:

                              @Jhong,

                              I still think I have a lot to learn in writing. There are so many styles to choose from and so many ways to present them. To think that is is only the poetry part. Wait til you see the prose that a lot of great writers make.

                              Newbie lang ako. ;)

                              Z

                              • At 2009.09.01 13:41, Zorlone said:

                                @Holly,

                                I love that line. My protagonist is just too stubborn. LOL

                                Z

                                • At 2009.09.01 13:43, Zorlone said:

                                  @Petit,

                                  Ah… true! That would have been a great experience, to write for a play. I hope that time comes soon! (Wishful thinking) hehehe

                                  Z

                                  • At 2009.09.01 16:05, jan geronimo said:

                                    Magpapatuka na lang ako sa ahas. Ditch the beatch… lols. Reads like balagtasan in English. Pero I like it, no worries. :)

                                    • At 2009.09.02 00:37, fifi said:

                                      natawa naman ako sa fb status ni jan about this poem, followed this link from there. maarte nga, at oa ng girl ha… if i were her, go na! easy to get talaga. hehehe…

                                      very engaging, doc z!

                                      • At 2009.09.02 00:44, fifi said:

                                        mas funny pala side comment ni jan dito. hahahah… it is only in this poem that i read a softer side (sobrang cheesy!) of prometheus. back in college, i watched this political documentary entitled ‘prometheus bound’, since then i have associated this titan with the existing social ills, and the helplessness to do something about it for fear of getting punished by the powers that be. asus. (makibaka!) hahahahaha

                                        • At 2009.09.02 18:59, Zorlone said:

                                          @Jan,

                                          Hehehe. Do you want a non poisonous snake to bite you? Pwede naman yun e. hehehe. Not as painful as to give your heart to the father of the one you love.

                                          Z

                                          • At 2009.09.02 19:02, Zorlone said:

                                            @Fifi,

                                            Thanks for following that link and I’m glad I didn’t disappoint you. he he he.

                                            Z

                                            • At 2009.09.02 19:04, Zorlone said:

                                              @Fifi (for second comment)

                                              Yeah, I thought Prometheus was also like that. I like his immortality and drew a different picture of him in this poem. Thanks again for dropping by.

                                              Z

                                              • At 2009.09.03 16:06, madz said:

                                                Isang makabagbag damdaming tula naman Doc Z. You have that gift to write in almost all aspects. *applause*

                                                • At 2009.09.03 20:17, fifi said:

                                                  Do you want a non poisonous snake to bite you? Pwede naman yun e. hehehe. Not as painful as to give your heart to the father of the one you love. ——– grabe ka doc z. sobrang cheesy! di ko naman kinaya tong mga linyang ‘to. by the way, may rhythm yung poem mo, kaya siguro engaging. (i’m not an expert on poems).

                                                  • At 2009.09.05 06:51, Zorlone said:

                                                    @Madz,

                                                    Thanks! I am still learning in this art form. ;)

                                                    Z

                                                    • At 2009.09.05 06:54, Zorlone said:

                                                      @Fifi,

                                                      I like rhythm it makes the poem more engaging. (toink!) I just repeated what you said.

                                                      This type of poetry suits me best an for the readers who love to read songs.

                                                      BTW, cheesy nga talaga ako. LOL

                                                      Z

                                                      • At 2009.09.05 07:53, Dragon Blogger said:

                                                        My favorite poem this week by far Zorlone, I found the whole Man: Woman: part unique to express who was speaking, I have found in my poetry, I had a hard time expressing “Spoken words” from a character in my poems.

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                                                              • At 2009.09.09 10:42, darbs said:

                                                                I agree with Holly.

                                                                Here is my version:

                                                                Son, you don’t have to prove anything.

                                                                “DITCH THE PSYCHO CHICK.”

                                                                Extra, extra!

                                                                From exodians.wordpress.com blog,

                                                                Congratulations! for winning the Influential Official 2009 emerging blogs.

                                                                • At 2009.09.09 16:33, Zorlone said:

                                                                  @Darbs,

                                                                  Thank you so much for the support in the EIB 2009.

                                                                  Yeah! Sometimes, loving someone blindly can push us to make irrational decisions.

                                                                  Z

                                                                  • At 2009.12.21 08:01, brainteaser said:

                                                                    Hi Zorlone!

                                                                    Your mythology-inspired poem is well done. :-)

                                                                    ~Sherma :-)

                                                                    • At 2010.01.05 11:29, Zorlone said:

                                                                      Sherma,

                                                                      Thank you for the visit and the very nice compliment.

                                                                      Z

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