Phone Number – A Flash Fiction (140 words)

10.07.09

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“Call me!” shouted this handsome young man as Charity left the club with a loud techno music.

She folded the napkin where Ever scribbled his name and number. He was more like Jhong, her fiancé, but, not entirely. She missed him so much, that the very thought of his name brought painfully fond memories.

It wasn’t fair that Jhong left her a week before their wedding: she blamed her parents for not completely trusting him despite his efforts to win them over, she blamed herself for leaving him just for a few minutes, lastly, she blamed God for taking him before his time.

That was three years ago. She stopped blaming anyone else.

Before she started the car, she looked at the napkin one last time, then saved the number in her cell phone.

She drove home thinking of Ever.

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Thanks to Charity Joy Bell for giving me an Honest Scrap Award. Here is my way of saying thank you. Pareng Ever, I hope you enjoyed this flash fiction and Jhong, I O U big time.

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Zorlone, an anagram of my name. A title fitting to this blog of mine. Words are created every time such as blogs created online. This site will showcase thoughts translated into words. Dream. Create. Inspire. Follow me in Twitter @Zorlone or visit me too at 140 Flash Fiction.

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27 Comments

  • At 2009.10.07 14:08, Tweets that mention Phone Number | Zorlone - Filipino Poet and Writer -- Topsy.com said:

    [...] This post was mentioned on Twitter by Lorenzo Bernardino. Lorenzo Bernardino said: Phone Number – A Flash Fiction (140 words) – http://bit.ly/1uKMds [...]

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    • At 2009.10.07 06:58, jangeronimo said:

      And here's a blank cheque for installing disqus in your blog. Yes – FTW!

      Conflict, remorse, loss and a promise of a new beginning in 140 words. I'm impressed! I'm sensing an appetite for this. Shall I say this is marvelous or splendid. I'm stumped. :)

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      • At 2009.10.07 07:04, zorlone said:

        Got that blank cheque! Will be using that to buy an uber web host and to publish my own book. he he he.

        Good thing you claimed your avatar here. :)

        You can experiment on one. Do you want to give it a try? Do I smell a guest post?

        Z

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        • At 2009.10.07 07:10, jangeronimo said:

          Uh-oh – somebody is fishing in murky waters. Ahehehe. I hate to promise
          anything, but I'd give it a serious thought. Pssst – I owe Elmot and Jaypee
          and Holly and Jen. Hays, baka andyan na sila, I had better make my exit
          already. Ahahaha

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          • At 2009.10.07 07:17, zorlone said:

            As a native of Malabon, I am not used to “fish” LJ. Here, we pick up bangus
            or tilapia from the “baha” LOL. So, there's always a bounty of catch. ;)

            Z

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            • At 2009.10.07 13:27, Jena Isle said:

              I like your flash fictions, they're good and “meaty “- Indeed, you could publish your book of flash fictions too, Z. Nothing is impossible to a persistent person. You can do it.

              I like this story better than the first because it has an air of optimism. For such a very brief story, that's already an achievement. Way to go!

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              • At 2009.10.07 14:06, jhongmed said:

                As I've tweeted earlier, You did kill me this time! Lols! But I love it! Great work Doc Z.
                I'm still on the bus but can't wait to comment here.

                BTW, Disqus really looks great with your theme. The linkwithin too it gives flavor to your theme.

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                • At 2009.10.07 14:11, jhongmed said:

                  Speaking of guest post…. hmm Doc Z you owe me a guest post… Plzzzzz.

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                  • At 2009.10.07 18:29, zorlone said:

                    No problem pare! Will e-mail you that post.

                    Z

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                    • At 2009.10.07 18:30, zorlone said:

                      Jen,

                      I do hope that what we talked about would materialize. That will keep me excited for a long time. Well, at least until we can publish. he he he

                      Z

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                      • At 2009.10.07 18:31, zorlone said:

                        Jhong,

                        This is just fiction, you know that. I wouldn't want to kill you bro.

                        Yeah, Disqus does look good, doesn't it?

                        Z

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                        • At 2009.10.08 07:02, minniemadz said:

                          Wow, nice story! Pero Doc Z, ayan ka na naman, may pinatay ka na namang character, LOL!

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                          • At 2009.10.08 11:28, zorlone said:

                            Thanks Madz!

                            Oo nga ano? he he he. Di bale, fiction lang naman yun e.

                            Z

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                            • At 2009.10.08 13:57, jangeronimo said:

                              Ahahaha. Madz, you're keeping body count? That's funny.

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                              • At 2009.10.08 15:30, Jena Isle said:

                                It will materialize, Z. Just keep that faith. Nothing is impossible.

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                                • At 2009.10.08 15:52, zorlone said:

                                  Thanks Jen,

                                  Your support is unfaltering.

                                  Z

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                                  • At 2009.10.09 02:52, minniemadz said:

                                    He he he, Jan, hindi ba 'yung una sa Night Duty namatay (o nabuhay) si Rey. Then everyone else follows sa mga succeeding stories ni Doc Z :P

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                                    • At 2009.10.10 04:36, elmot said:

                                      Wow, Jan you got it right with Madz new found career here at Doc's FF posts…doing the body count of sad victims of literary creativity of our dear friend. :D

                                      The dark side is in the works again, wahahahhaha!

                                      I am just thankful I still ended up alive and kicking when he featured me on his FF, wahahha!

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                                      • At 2009.10.10 04:37, elmot said:

                                        Wow, Jan you got it right with Madz new found career here at Doc's FF posts…doing the body count of sad victims of literary creativity of our dear friend. :D

                                        The dark side is in the works again, wahahahhaha!

                                        I am just thankful I still ended up alive and kicking when he featured me on his FF, wahahha!

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                                        • At 2009.10.10 05:23, zorlone said:

                                          Elmot,

                                          He he he…. The creative juices are more tasty in the dark side of writing.

                                          Actually, I haven't totally crossed the border.

                                          Z

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                                          • At 2009.10.10 06:19, C said:

                                            Oh my god…my heart jumped into my throat when I read my name in that first line….oh my god… i HATE you!!!! So this is how you get back at me for “victimizing” you!!!! hahahahaha!

                                            Okay….thank you… (nalang) …hahahahaha! :) ))

                                            You are sweet. :)

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                                            • At 2009.10.10 07:25, elmot said:

                                              I am wondering how it taste on that side of blogging…

                                              Don't forget to visit my blog:
                                              http://www.pinoysoundingboard.com

                                              Follow me at Twitter:
                                              http://www.twitter.com/elmot

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                                              • At 2009.10.10 12:25, zorlone said:

                                                C,

                                                You got me here. I thought you were going to throw something at me. This is how I return the favor of a blog award. I usually dedicate a poem or a story</>. I think this is more interesting to give because the characters, you, played a role in the story. It sort of gave some attributes behind the names.

                                                Well, at least in my imagination. I hope you liked it.

                                                Z

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                                                • At 2009.10.10 12:28, zorlone said:

                                                  Elmot,

                                                  I am sure that the taste of dark chocolates would linger in your memory like a virgin on a honeymoon. ;)

                                                  Z

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                                                  • At 2009.10.12 01:52, elmot said:

                                                    How could anyone resist black chocolate that tastes like venue on honeymoon
                                                    night bro.

                                                    Don't forget to visit my blog:
                                                    http://www.pinoysoundingboard.com

                                                    Follow me at Twitter:
                                                    http://www.twitter.com/elmot

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                                                    • At 2009.10.14 20:07, jangeronimo said:

                                                      Oo nga, Madz. Grabe itong si Doc Z. Minsan heartless po yan.
                                                      Pero check his flash fiction on Influenza Bloggers. Nobody died there. Ay
                                                      meron pala – iyong naunsyaming pagnanasa ni Doc Z sa katabi niya sa public
                                                      transpo. ahahaha <a href=
                                                      http://influenzabloggers.wordpress.com/2009/10/...
                                                      - A Flash Fiction

                                                      Enjoy! “,)

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                                                      • At 2009.10.23 15:36, johnsame said:

                                                        I think a few pictures might help this blog

                                                        Thanks
                                                        gibs
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